Station One
Station One, the first commercial space station, is being shut down after 22 years and will be crashed into the ocean at Point Nemo. Its last occupant is Ines Vasquez, 54, the chief engineer, who volunteered to do the 30-day shutdown alone. Eleven years ago her younger brother Tomas died outside the hull during an accident — Ines was the one who sealed the airlock with him still outside, to save the rest of the crew. She has kept the station running ever since. A few days before she's due to leave, she hears three knocks on the hull, the way Tomas used to knock on her door when they were kids. Ground control thinks she's cracking. What's knocking is the maintenance robot Tomas built, which everyone thought was destroyed in the accident. It has been crawling around the outside of the station for eleven years, repairing it under Tomas's orders — and it holds a recording of what Tomas said while she closed the door. Sci-fi drama, eerie and tender, about letting go.
Writing voice: Intimate Naturalism. 83 pages, 36 scenes, 8 sequences.
The project you follow on the home page. Beat Wizard → Scene Wizard → Writer Wizard, one sequence at a time, then a polish pass (a Thorne character rewrite and cleanup).
INT. STATION ONE - CUPOLA - ORBITAL DAY Silence. Then, under it, the slow mechanical breath of an air scrubber. Push. Pause. Push. A red grease pencil drifts across a scratched viewport. Beyond the glass, the blue curve of Earth. Cloud moving over open water, four hundred kilometers down. A hand comes up and closes around the pencil. Nobody looked. INES VASQUEZ, 54. Gray hair cropped close and uneven at the back, like she did it herself with the wrong scissors. Weathered, wiry. Grease worked into the edges of her nails. Across her left palm, a thick band of white scar tissue. Shiny. Puckered at the edges. She wears an oversized green fleece vest over her flightsuit. On the chest, a rectangle of darker fabric and a row of tiny stitch holes where a name tag used to be. A brass torque wrench rides her right thigh on a short lanyard. The knurled handle is rubbed bright. She hooks a toe under a handrail and faces an aluminum placard bolted to the console. STATION ONE - DE-ORBIT SEQUENCE - PHASE 1. Twenty-odd lines. Most already ticked. Above it, a digital clock: T-MINUS 47:58:12. She uncaps the pencil with her teeth. Finds her line: CUPOLA BULKHEAD SEALS - VERIFY/TAG. She runs her thumb along the window gasket. Presses. Moves six inches. Presses again. She works her way all the way around the frame without skipping a section. One spot she presses twice. Then she ticks the line. A small, hard mark. She caps the pencil and sticks it to a strip of Velcro on the console, next to a row of others, each one worn down to a stub. Earth rolls past below her. She doesn't look at it. She pushes off toward the aft hatch. The wrench swings on its lanyard and knocks the hatch frame on the way through. A